Tuesday, June 30, 2009

Revisions Part Deux

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 16-21 (end)

Total words: 69,910

Fixed: Passive voice, complicated sentences, more description

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I had every intention of quitting earlier, but decided 11:30 was too early to stop working. So I finished the book. It's still going to need a lot of work, but I think I've done all I can and fresh eyes--specifically Jodi's eyes wink--are going to have to look at it before I can do any more. So I'm e-mailing it to her in a couple of minutes (you have been warned, Miss Jodi!) and going to watch more X-Files, cross-stitch, read, and finish outlining Dragon Knight.

Phew!

Revisions

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 11-15

Total words: 63,730

Fixed: Anachronistic language, more description/detail

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Monday, June 29, 2009

More Progress

I got a few more chapters outlined on Dragon Knight today, and am having fun with the idea of playing with a twist on the fantasy trope of the love-interest chick cutting off all her hair, dressing as a boy, and pretending to be the knight's page. The twist being that the knight doesn't find this at all endearing, actually finding it kind of weird and creepy.

W.E.'s interview was a 50/50 thing; he's not sure he nailed it, but he doesn't think he completely messed it up. The interviewers were apparently worried about him being "overqualified" for an assistant's position (and yet somehow he's not qualified enough for a generalist, which is the next step up--go figure) and running off the second someone offers him something better. He tried to convince them that that's not going to happen. Hopefully he succeeded. Otherwise, tomorrow he's taking a test to see if he can do water testing at the water treatment plant, and another temp agency apparently "has an opportunity" for him, but haven't gotten back to him on that yet. SIGH.

Well, as long as SOMETHING comes through to pay the bills, I guess I'll have to be happy. But I'll still complain if W.E. comes home smelling of sewage every night. mad

Sunday, June 28, 2009

Outlining

I started outlining Dragon Knight while watching The X-Files, and may I just say that I love my copy of The Writer's Complete Fantasy Reference. While it's not quite complete (I had to check the Internet for the title of the guy who would run a knight's household for him [steward]), I used it to make sure I wasn't about to make any really stupid mistakes in Feudalism, Manorialism, knighthood, or anything else I'll be using in this novel. I've got about 6 chapters outlined so far, and I think it'll go really well. I'll probably start writing on Tuesday--tomorrow is W.E.'s interview and he's asked me to go with him, so I'll finish outlining while I'm sitting in the car (yay), then whap my head against the window while I try to come up with something to do for Super Tech Book 1.

Yay for getting another novel underway!

Revisions

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 10-11

Total words: 63,559

Fixed: Yet another chapter numbering error, passive voice, magic system continuity

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I'm still trying to decide what the major conflict for the first Super Tech book should be. I've decided that each major conflict should be metaphorical; the second book's conflict is peer pressure, but on such a scale that the main character will be certain she's going insane by the end of it. The registration conflict will be a metaphor for the fear of those who are different. I want the conflict in the first book to be a metaphor for trying new things, being in a new environment, but I can't seem to think of anything. Part of me thinks that the main character's starting school at 26, in an unfamiliar city, working with unfamiliar concepts (like magic) should be enough, but another part of me knows that some overarching conflict will be necessary. In Buffy, the newness conflict in "The Freshman" was Buffy's loss of self-confidence and getting her ass kicked by a regular old vampire, but I don't have monsters to fall back on. Oh, well; I'll figure something out. Meanwhile, I'll probably start outlining Dragon Knight.

Saturday, June 27, 2009

Revisions

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 8-9

Total words:
63,530 (oh, noes, I lost a few!)

Fixed: passive voice, continuity error, "the ___ of ___", complicated sentence structures

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I have "The Nothing Song" by Alice in Chains stuck in my head.

That is all.

OWW Rocks

I got my first review of a story from someone at OWW. It was thought-out, professional, pointed out good as well as bad (only not "bad" so much as "things I need to work on"), and overall had a very encouraging, you're-on-the-right-track tone. Compared to other reviews I've gotten (mostly from that one creative writing class that I will refrain from ranting about again), this was a breath of fresh air. Rather than making me dread revision, I finished reading the review with a sense of "I can DO this!" and was ready to immediately dive in and implement the reviewer's suggestions.

I think I love you, OWW.

Friday, June 26, 2009

Revisions

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 5-7

Total words: 63,536

Fixed: typos, passive voice, sudden unexplained spelling-change in a name, magic system error

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Today I joined the SFF OWW. I'm hoping that, since writers have to pay for it, I'll get some serious, constructive feedback. I haven't left Critters and I'm not sure I will. We'll have to see how OWW goes.

I had another novel idea last night, one I'm calling Dragon Knight. A good chunk of the plot sprang to my mind full-formed, so outlining it should be fairly easy. I'm also taking suggestions for major conflicts for the Super Tech series. So far I have legislation forcing the registration of people's magic talents, much like the X-Men series, and someone suggested a light magic vs. dark magic dichotomy for one of them. That might end up being an overarching theme, actually--what are the ethics of using these things they're learning out in the real world?

W.E. missed a call from the temp agency yesterday and of course the guy wasn't in today, but apparently he found something for W.E. Maybe this will be the little thing we need to tide us over before W.E. starts at this job I KNOW he's going to get.

Now to go have lunch, fold some laundry, and watch The X-Files. Good times.

Thursday, June 25, 2009

Revisions

Necromancer

Revised: Ch. 3-4

Total words: 63,363

Fixed: passive voice, accents, chapter numbering error

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I submitted "The Queen's Huntsman" to Critters this morning and I'm working toward a MPC so it'll bump up the queue and get read in a week or so instead of six. I think "Dragon in a Mall" is dead, at least for now, so I'm actively searching for a new short story idea. I know I should spend more time revising Necromancer every day and really plow through it so I can give it to Jodi (and possibly Critters, though I'll probably revise according to Jodi's comments first) to read for me. But my concentration is shot, along with my sleep cycle. I think once W.E. starts working (fingers crossed, interview on Monday!), I'll be able to do more just because I concentrate better when I'm alone, but for now I'll do what I can with what I've got.

Wednesday, June 24, 2009

Stats/Revision

Necromancer

Revised: Chapter 2

Total words: 63,236

Fixed: continuity error, character adjustments

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"The Queen's Huntsman" (complete)

Total words: 3,634

Favorite: Not any one thing, actually. I'm pretty happy with all of it.

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When a story wants to be written, it's much easier to do than when I'm trying to force it. The idea for "The Queen's Huntsman," which is "Snow White" from the perspective of the Huntsman, came to me last night, and I sat down and wrote it in one fell swoop today. It poured out, unlike "Dragon in a Mall," which is one of the most difficult short stories I've ever attempted. I'm considering giving up on it, honestly. I guess horror just isn't my thing. I'll put it on the back burner and see if I can't get it going later. That took up all of my attention today, though, so I didn't do as much revising on Necromancer as I would have liked, but that's okay. Short stories are important, too. I'll toss it into the Critters queue tomorrow and see how they can tear it to shreds for me (wink), then revise it and try to sell it.

But for now, I need to make dinner and get ready to go to a Wednesday night worship service, so my work for today is done.

Tuesday, June 23, 2009

Revision/Stats

Necromancer

Revised: Prologue & Chapter 1

Total words: 63,192

Fixed: passive voice, wordiness, "the ___ of ___"

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"Dragon in a Mall" (started over yet again)

New words: 1,181
Total words: 1,181

Mean things: paperwork. Shock. PTSD.

Favorite: The pile of forms in front of him blurred as his eyes unfocused again. There was always a lot of paperwork when an officer had to discharge his weapon, but this time was different. This time, three officers and seven civilians had gone down.

This time, he’d had to shoot a dragon.

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One of these days, this dragon story will work.

Things are looking up, though. W.E. has an in-person interview on Monday for the same company he phone interviewed with last week. He got his next student loan payment deferred. Parents sent us money. As long as he gets this job, we may actually make it. We'll still take any consulting jobs people want to toss our way, though. wink

Friday, June 19, 2009

Stats

"Dragon in a Mall"

New words: 1,680
Total words: 1,680

Favorite: Tired. Daisy stopped fighting and stared up at the statue, which was coated liberally in a dark, wet substance—blood, she thought fuzzily, my blood. Each breath was more of an effort, her vision faded. As darkness closed in around her, she saw the thing above her move, licking the blood from its muzzle. Shrieks echoed through the cavernous space around her as she slid into cold, welcoming blackness.

Mean things: Poor dead girl. Gang activity.

Music:
"All Nightmare Long" - Metallica
"Tourniquet" - Evanescence

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Finally got this kicked off by starting in a completely different place than I intended to. I wanted to do the entire thing from the cops' perspective, letting the reader find out what's going on as the cops do. Instead, I went ahead and started with the event that gets the dragon woken, then switched to the cops. So it starts in an action-packed scene, then slows down a bit as we get to know the cops, and it'll pick back up when they have to fight the dragon. I'm not quite sure how that's going to go down yet--I'm thinking M4s will be involved--but I can't seem to keep my mind on the writing today, so I'm gonna go do something else while I let the story spin out in my head so I can finish it tomorrow.

Thursday, June 18, 2009

Brick Wall

I tried to write today. As my followers on Twitter can tell you, it did not go well. I got up with every virtuous intention of rewriting "Dragon in a Mall" by blending Quarantine (NPR reporter doing a ride-along), Predator 2 (insane gangers doing a bizarre hazing ritual), Mirrors/Dawn of the Dead (it all takes place in a creepy, abandoned mall), and tossing a dragon into the mix. I got far enough to realize that a) I have no idea how police talk on their radios; b) there was no good place for the story to start; and c) I was boring the living hell out of myself just writing the damn thing.

So I put it down and decided to take the day off. I spent a good chunk of time cross-stitching and watching House, then learned that my assistantship, which I was given to understand was a year-round thing and would start in July, actually starts midway through August. The meltdown that followed was impressive and spurred an insane job hunt for W.E. that took me to the darkest places on the Internet (okay, no, not really, but places I hadn't thought of looking before). When I recovered from that, there was more House and cross-stitch, and now I'm trying not to come down with a cold that I think might actually be stress (or panic) induced.

I'm trying to force ideas because I need to write some short stories so I can try to sell them, because that's the only way I can bring in any money. And it'll probably be too late, anyway; by the time anything I write now gets published so I get paid, it'll be next year and hopefully this crisis will be over.

Hopefully.

Wednesday, June 17, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 5,855 (my hands hurt)
Total words: 63,050

Favorite: Actually can't. Spoilery. Sorry!

Typo: eyes flue open

Mean things: assault. Attempted murder. Spoilery things.
Nice things: bad Necromancer defeated. Other spoilery things.

Music:
"Bleed the Freak" - Alice in Chains
"Bodies" - Drowning Pool
"Let it Die" - Foo Fighters
"Time" - Sarah McLachlan
"Bittersweet" - Within Temptation

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Draft #1 is now finished. Obviously I still need to add about 17k to it, but I can do that in revisions. For now, the story is down on paper (well, in my computer, anyway) and the main plot arc is complete. I also proved to myself that I have the discipline to do this like a job.

I'll give Necromancer a couple of days, work on "Dragon in a Mall" and Super Tech, then I'll start revising and rebuilding my outline to reflect how the story actually went. I didn't deviate too far from the outline, just minor incidents happened in other places than I intended them to at first.

For now, I'm going to enjoy this sense of accomplishment and go watch House.

Tuesday, June 16, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 4,027
Total words: 57,195

Mean things: two people dead. Gloating Necromancer. Grieving.
Nice things: getting help with the Necromancer. Ex explaining himself. Studying and practice paying off.

Favorite: She closed her eyes, trying to find something solid in the sea of surrealism she found herself in. Home was too far away, physically and in her mind. She almost couldn’t remember what school had been like, couldn’t imagine what running her father’s trade would be like. Her romance with Eldwin was like a dream, and it was over. Her friendship with Daoin felt a million miles away and a thousand years ago. She floated in a cloud of uncertainty and loneliness, and drifted with it into sleep.

Music:
"Demonoid Phenomenon" - Rob Zombie
"Burden of Sacrifice" - Full Blown Rose

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I had every intention of finishing the draft today, but a storm has blown in, complete with tornado warning, and I'm getting off the computer now.

Monday, June 15, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 2,880
Total words: 53,167

Mean things: stuck-up people.
Nice things: helpful person. Ex being less of an ass.

Favorite: Shandi snorted, and Akasha knew it was because she shared Akasha’s view: Necromancers as a breed were evil. She flushed. Despite her own dislike of her Talent, she had never felt so dirty. But with this incredibly beautiful, Talented woman making no bones about her belief that Akasha was an evil creature by virtue of having the Necromantic Talent, she wanted to hide in a corner and find a way to excise her Talent, scrub out her soul until she felt clean again.

Music:
"Let it Go" - Fauxliage
"Holier than Thou" - Metallica

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I'm halfway through the last scene of this chapter, and my brain refuses to focus. I've had trouble with focus all day, and I think this chapter is going to require some serious revision because of it. It doesn't help that it's sort of a linking chapter--getting us from one stage in the plot to the climax, and not much is actually happening besides setup, and it's boring. But necessary. There's a whole chunk that I feel is a cop-out on the plot--sort of a, here, let's get the protag all this information without her having to hunt for it because I'm too out of it to write her hunting for it. There. Sorted.

Not good.

Tomorrow will hopefully be better. For today, I'm going to go play some video games, then watch True Blood, and later finish the Lord of the Rings marathon we started yesterday (12 AM is really too late to start Return of the King. At least if you want to get any sleep).

In other, better, news, W.E. has a phone interview scheduled for Wednesday. As always, thoughts, prayers, chants, and human sacrifices are appreciated.

Sunday, June 14, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 3,665
Total words: 50,285

Mean things: the ex-boyfriend is a real asshole.
Nice things: caravan master is helpful.

Favorite: Maybe the Necromancer would be nicer to it than the Healer-Knight and the girl had been. Maybe the Necromancer would feed it—
—food, the warmth of a life, almost as good as the warmth of the fire, filling it, making it less cold for a while, just a little while, almost like being alive again—
Maybe.

Music:
"Morphing Through Time" - Enigma
"Tragic Kingdom" - No Doubt

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Apparently my earlier catharsis wasn't quite enough, because the ex-boyfriend (who is not an analogue to any ex of mine, by the way) is getting to be more and more of an ass, to the point that I'm thinking earlier scenes, where he's nice, will have to be revised to explain this. Either that or I'll have to revise THESE scenes to make him NOT such an ass, but it's such wonderful conflict I kind of want to keep it. Explaining why he's going through so much trouble just to be mean to her will be difficult, though; bullies don't generally travel hundreds of miles to keep bullying their targets. There's got to be more to it than that. I'll figure it out.

Had some trouble getting started this morning, but I managed to break 50K, which was really my goal for today. I didn't get the whole novel outlined yesterday, either, but I'm ahead of myself by a chapter even after today's writing, so I think I'll be okay. I can do more tonight and tomorrow.

In other news, True Blood starts up again tonight! So excited!

Friday, June 12, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 4,959
Total words: 46,640

Mean things: emotional turmoil. Schism in relationship. Lots of rain. Bad Necromancer evades trap.
Nice things: feet healed. Help from a friend.

Favorite: (picked from lots of stuff I'm pretty proud of, actually)
“Of course it’s raining!” Akasha yelled over the pounding of huge drops of water on the ground. “Raining” was a tame word for this; it was a deluge of mythical proportions. They were drenched to the bone in seconds, and her skin ceased to notice individual drops. Remembering a story her father had told her when she was a child, she summoned up a smile and said, “Think it’s time to build a boat and start gathering animals?”

(and a new category)
Music that came up on WMP that was relevant to these scenes:
"I Don't Care" - Apocalyptica
"Bother" - Stone Sour
"Soldiers of the Wasteland" - DragonForce
"Damaged" - Plumb

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Phew! That was a LOT of work--about 4-5 hours of nearly constant writing. And I'm definitely done for the day. Not just because I've run out of outlined story, but because I'm TIRED. My brain couldn't do any more if I beat it half to death. I pushed right to the edge of my endurance. But it was FUN, too! I'm proud of this word count. Yay for having a workspace set up again.

Now to go to the store and veg for the rest of the day. Tomorrow I will outline some more. The goal: get the rest of the book outlined, then tackle more writing on Sunday. If I want to get paid for this, it's time I start treating it like an actual job. Let's see how that works. smile

Tuesday, June 09, 2009

We Need Help

I've been trying really hard to keep the vast majority of our problems out of this blog, but we're in such a spot that we can see the bottom from here, and it's terrifying. We've been trying to find W.E. a job for the past 3 months, and despite about 50 applications and 4 different temp agencies, nothing seems to be working. We are going to run out of money at the end of this month if he doesn't find something--even a small something!--very very soon.

W.E. has a Master's degree in Industrial/Organizational Psychology, which means he can do just about anything Human Resources related and is willing to do consulting. He can look over resumes/cover letters; run statistics for employee surveys, turnover, adverse impact analysis, salary equity analysis, etc.; job analysis; comp analysis; designing training programs . . . pretty much anything that has anything to do with HR, he can cover.

And if anyone happens to live in the Nashville/Murfreesboro area and knows of someplace that's hiring for HR or Administrative positions, a heads-up on that would be quite helpful, as well. If anyone needs to contact me, they can do so at scarroll21@gmail.com and I'll pass the information on to W.E. and/or put him in touch with them.

We appreciate any help anyone can toss our way.

Monday, June 08, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 833

Total words: 41,679

Mean things: mean Necromancer gets worried. Icky inn.

Favorite: Spirits lost their Talent when they lost their bodies. That was the bit that was giving him the most trouble with his immortality plan, after all. He knew all too well how difficult it was for a spirit to retain something that was so bound to the physical.

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I've worked out the next obstacle in Akasha's path, and I think I've worked out where the rest of the book is going to go, though I'm a little shaky on exactly how it's going to get there. And there's a new character I'll be introducing, though I'm worried about her being sort of deus-ex-machina-y. I suppose if it seems that way to others, I can go back and add hints about her existence in earlier. Won't be difficult.

W.E. is currently at an interview at a temp agency. I'm very very worried about how we're going to survive the next month. Prayers, chants, dances, and human sacrifice are all appreciated.

Saturday, June 06, 2009

House & Cuddy Art

I haven't done anything with GIMP in awhile and I felt the burning need to do something with House (probably because I've been rewatching the series), so here:

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It's a little oranger than I wanted, but I think it works. I'll give ten points to anyone who can figure out why I did it on a spiderweb background.

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 1,332

Total words: 40,846

Mean things: big fight with boyfriend. Feet hurt worse.

Favorite: Akasha forced her numb body to turn and continue walking, though the only thing she could feel was her feet, which hurt almost bad enough to distract her from the new pain in her heart. She felt as though she were sinking, as though her internal organs were settling into her knees, as though her heart had gone missing. She had to force herself to take one breath, then another. Even her chest muscles felt heavy and numb; she knew that if she didn’t think about every breath, she would stop breathing.

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Writing is often good for catharsis, and at times can almost make you glad bad things have happened to you. The way Akasha feels in this passage is exactly the way I felt after an incident about a month ago, and while I'm mostly over it, I still remember what it felt like and I used that. As a matter of fact, if that incident hadn't happened, this passage probably would have been a lot more boring, because I wouldn't have needed to include this fight in order to purge the last of the feelings for myself. And yet, the fight is necessary for the characters, plot, and tension, so it all worked out nice. I regret not writing down exactly how I felt at the time, especially after I knew I'd be using it in the book. I can conjure up most of it, which helps, but having an exact account from the time would have been helpful.

I don't remember if I've mentioned my idea for a rather large series here. I'm planning a series about a magic technical institute, nicknamed Super Tech, and a woman's journey through it. I've gotten as far as planning the curriculum and writing a bit of the history of the place. Since this will be a series, I know I'm going to have to do some serious pre-writing structuring before I ever get started. I'm not sure exactly what will happen in each book, though I do know at some point I plan to have the characters deal with government-ordered registration, much like the mutant registration in the X-Men movies. Mostly I'm worried about getting Necromancer finished, at least the first draft, before I begin writing the Super Tech novels, so I've got plenty of time to think about them and work out plot arcs.

Wednesday, June 03, 2009

Stats

Necromancer

New words: 539

Total words: 39,514

Mean things: boyfriend still being a jerk. Sore feet. The in-between is creepy.

Favorite: She didn’t realize she had stopped walking until Eldwin cleared his throat. She glanced at him, startled, then nodded and forced her feet to move again. The last thing she wanted to do was go down that road, between the two rows of buildings with their empty windows and their odd leaning, the buildings behind them crowded so close she was afraid they might push over the first row.

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Yes, I know, 500 words is lame. Sorry. cry

We had a crazy thunderstorm last night that may have included hail and made me worry about a tornado. I have no idea what to do in case of a tornado. I've never lived anywhere that I've had to worry about that! Luckily, it doesn't seem that there was a tornado, and if there was hail, it didn't hurt the car.

Today I get to keep trying to find W.E. a job, do more unpacking, and make a trip to the laundromat. Joy of joys.

Monday, June 01, 2009

Reconnected

The Internet is back and I missed it SO MUCH! This weekend was the big move, and I am now comfortably ensconced in my new living room--well, as comfortably as one can be with boxes piled everywhere and no cable yet (can't afford it).

It was a heck of a weekend, too. It started on Thursday, at 7 AM, when we got up to go get the U-Haul--from another freaking state. When we got back and began loading the thing, it quickly became apparent that: a) I hadn't packed nearly as thoroughly as I thought I had; and b) fitting all of our stuff into a 17' truck was going to be rough. And it was. With the help of some very good friends, we got most of it in there, though. They all had to leave by late afternoon, however, leaving W.E. and me on our own. It took us until 2:30 AM to get everything into the U-Haul and the apartment cleaned (and I'll admit it was a half-assed cleaning, but I couldn't bring myself to care at that point. If they say something, I have two words: AIR. CONDITIONER.). Then there was the 2 1/2 hour drive to W.E.'s mom's house, where we crashed until 9:00 AM, got up, took showers, had breakfast, and got BACK on the road for another 4 1/2 hours.

When we got to the apartment, the door was open and there was a man putting down carpet. I was ready to scream--until he said that he just had the stairs left to do, there had been an emergency delay, and he was REALLY sorry and he'd only be about 30 minutes. W.E.'s mom and her boyfriend began unloading the U-Haul while we ran off to get the electricity turned on and get our keys. About an hour of rapid unloading later, they had to go home. Luckily, they had brought about $100 worth of groceries with them, so our fridge was stocked, even though part of my crazy cleaning spree at the old place had included chucking EVERYTHING that was in the fridge and a LOT of what was in the freezer (mostly condiments, alcohol, and really old stuff that I knew we'd never eat). Since everything had gotten piled in the living room, we decided to finish with the U-Haul later and try to move stuff upstairs to make more room.

On Saturday we finished with the U-Haul, turned it in, and continued rearranging. I have more bruises on my arms and legs than I really want to think about, but we have a functional living room, bedroom, bathroom, and kitchen now. The dining room is still a work in progress.

On Sunday, we were both SO exhausted we were getting sick, so we took the day off.

And today W.E. went in for an interview with a temp agency, only to discover that they had to reschedule and they'd been TRYING to call us. . . . Stupid moving making our phone disconnected. mad BUT on Friday he got a phone interview, and we're hoping that turns out well.

A few notes about the area: sales tax is STUPID. It's about 10%. We're planning on being very very frugal with our food money, which has never really been necessary before (not extremely necessary, anyway. I mean, we don't buy steak or caviar, but we never had to go without our chips and cookies and soda. Now we probably will for awhile). But almost everyone we've had to interact with has been SUPER nice. Cashiers, utility people, the carpet guy, random neighbors. . . . All really really nice people. It's great.

Also, today I went up to MTSU to turn in my assistantship paperwork and met the Dean of English Graduate Studies, who is (you guessed it) SUPER nice, and told me that I don't have to start taking classes until fall even though my assistantship starts in July.

In other news, due to the break, my reading has sped up to the point that I'm listing again instead of having individual book covers. I'm reading about a book a day at this point. I will run out of stuff to read (probably not, actually)!

Whew! I think that's everything for now. Hopefully in a day or two, things will be cleaned up enough that I can get some writing done again.